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[Laevi]

Sometimes you want an answer, or discuss things. Use this topic! Here I can reply. No flaming please.

My stories can be found here.

Edited by Laevi, 21 July 2011 - 07:05 PM.

[Laevi]

So I got this complaint:

Not to be too cranky, but it would be really awesome if you'd finish a story before losing interest and flitting off to a new one. Seems to be a trend (I *had* several of your stories as faves) and I guess I'll quit checking in. It's very sad and frustrating to get sucked into an interesting and well-written fiction, only to have it abandoned...with no resolution...are we really all this ADHD? You were updating this story practically daily, which was awesome, and had just gotten to a pivotal part, coming to the future. I was really psyched & now it's been over a month since it was updated & you're going great guns on a brand new story. Did you run out of plot? Lose inspiration? Get bored? You could at least write a crappy "and they lived happily ever after in any time they desired" to give the story closure.

Your disappointed reader,
Rae

Let me reply.

I don't have ADHD. I love my stories; each and every one of them. I love to update every day. I even write at work! But sometimes the flood of inspiration dries out, and I'm done for a while. I take a break. And I begin another story.

I'm sorry to disappoint readers. But isn't that what this site is for? Updating chapters, rather than posting a complete story in one go?

I can't force my inspiration. How can anyone expect that from me?

[Laevi]

Body of review from lividfire follows:

This story is crazy!!!!

Really.

From the fact they crashed for no reason( Lucky probably did it on purpouse just so he can as a true surf boy chill out and fuck a guy( well male whores usually get tired of women after a while and like to experiment.They call themselves bisexuals so they can dip into both jars and in th end they either realize they are latent homosexuals( most of them) or they continue till std/hiv finishes them off.))

THen Wards obsession with then name Janine( mentions her, writes her name).

Then the fact that Lucky ain't scared of toasting his dick and balls on those 670 degrees on the island( well, if he does at leas Ward's will get a dessert).

And the entire sex cene is very manly written.

Going at it with no reszriction&emotions only to get off a.s.ap.

I'm concerned for their mental health if their relationship procedes like this in th efuture, but since this is a wet dream/instant hard-fast jerk-off fantasy....It's crazy good.

And keep the chapters coming*blows her nose while holding her sunglasses becasue it's cold but the story is hot*



This made me laugh, but sad at the same time. This person didn't understand much, or expects too much. One or the other.

First of all, the storm made the plane crash. Lucky obviously lost control over the jet, and managed to crash in the trees of an island instead of in the ocean. It wasn't intentional.

And Lucky is no whore, he a pilot!

Ms Jocelin (Janine??) was Ward's secretary. She's dead. Of course he mentions her name, and writes her name in the sand of her grave. Really! Did you miss that?!

And the sex without emotion... They were just horny, and not in love. Of course it's matter-of-fact and 'manly'. They don't know each other at all!

Anyway, I hope you enjoy the rest of it!

Edited by Laevi, 24 October 2010 - 08:19 PM.

[Laevi]

Teeta left me this review. I felt the need to answer.

Popping in again after reading chap 4, which I found to be quite amusing Joel practising on a pillow really made me laugh and the fact that Perry heard it made it even more funny.Those two are indeed quite a pair!

still, there are a few things I'd like to share my thoughts on with you. Please, don't take it as something offending, or me criticising your story, far from it! I just like analyzing things, and the more I like them, the more I analyze.

While reading the whole story so far, I couldn't help but think of Joel before the accident. You clearly said that he was adrenaline junkie who didn't really have time to be with someone, neither a woman nor a man, and when he first saw Perry, he thought of him as 'sissy'. Which would mean that Joel was either straight before *or so he thought* or he was in denial. I'd say the second is closer to truth because I can't see a straight guy falling for another guy, even in Joel's situation. At first I found myself looking sideways when he fell for Perry right off the bat, so to speak. But considering what I just said, that he might have been in denial, it could be possible, nod nod. So, that's the first thing.


My response: Sometimes when I write my stories, it occurs to me that every guy in the world is gay without question. Of course it doesn't work like that in the real world. That's why I find it so funny XD My gay men are either obviously gay, straights who find their gay side and love it, or gay without appearing like it (surprise!). I like it that way ^^;

Words like Sissy, Faggot, you name it, are quite common in the gay scene I know. But in this case, I used the word because that's how guys like Perry were described in Joel's previous life. I thought I made that clear...? Oh well.

The second one is also about Perry, and well, his life. OK, so his accident happened two years before he met Perry, which means two years spent in hospitals and in rehab. Which means jobless. Since he has no family who would support him *also financially* he must be badly in debts now, or barely making ends meet *unless the state provides for him, which I doubt, especially that well, he never let his social worker come to his house and help him* Not to have any kinds of financial problems, Joel would have to have a fortune put aside from his work as a gym trainer.

You mean Joel. Frankly, I don't know. I've been out of work because I broke my back, for two years. I could pay every bill because of my insurance. Even when I wasn't able to go to the controlling doctor. No questions asked, because it was obvious what was wrong with me. With Joel, what questions will there be? The guy lost his legs...
So don't worry; he isn't rich, but he was insured. He had to be with a hobby like he had... >.>

And the third thing is about Perry, actually Is it possible that he had seen Joel before? *pretty impossible considering Joel's lifestyle before Perry popped in* He's acting with so much familiarity that it really makes me think he had maybe seen Joel before. Or he's a really extremely open person, comfortable with calling someone he met three times a 'darling' and 'baby' and not really getting embarrassed hearing Jole's little practice session and them mentioning it to him. Admittedly, I was hoping that he would hear Joel, nod nod, but also was kinda counting on it being revealed a bit later. The whole practice scene, in fact, made me think of a 'what-if' scenario: what if Perry was only acting the way he is out of a good heart towards a handicapped person? Hearing Joel shout his name like this would certainly make him run for the hills, wouldn't it? and even if he didn't, there would be a lot of awkwardness between them and he would not confess so gladly that he did hear everything, I guess.


Oh Perry... he's such a light footed fairy, falling for that hot dark guy with his Mediterranean looks. He has no doubt on his mind about whether he should fall in love or think first. No, he had never seen him before. If he had, Joel wouldn't have had the urge to do such dangerous things.

So all in all *am I even summarizing anything?* I enjoyed the chapter very much and thanks for your hard work so far! Looking forward to another chapter!

teeta

Glad you liked it. Remember I wrote four chapters in a small day. I barely thought about what I wrote, I only wanted to describe what I dreamed.

Laevi

Edited by Laevi, 21 July 2011 - 09:07 PM.

[teeta]

teeta here and also feeling the need to reply to the reply I got

My response: Sometimes when I write my stories, it occurs to me that every guy in the world is gay without question. Of course it doesn't work like that in the real world. That's why I find it so funny XD My gay men are either obviously gay, straights who find their gay side and love it, or gay without appearing like it (surprise!). I like it that way ^^;

Words like Sissy, Faggot, you name it, are quite common in the gay scene I know. But in this case, I used the word because that's how guys like Perry were described in Joel's previous life. I thought I made that clear...? Oh well.

(...)

You mean Joel. Frankly, I don't know. I've been out of work because I broke my back, for two years. I could pay every bill because of my insurance. Even when I wasn't able to go to the controlling doctor. No questions asked, because it was obvious what was wrong with me. With Joel, what questions will there be? The guy lost his legs...
So don't worry; he isn't rich, but he was insured. He had to be with a hobby like he had... >.>

(...)

Oh Perry... he's such a light footed fairy, falling for that hot dark guy with his Mediterranean looks. He has no doubt on his mind about whether he should fall in love or think first. No, he had never seen him before. If he had, Joel wouldn't have had the urge to do such dangerous things.

(...)

Glad you liked it. Remember I wrote four chapters in a small day. I barely thought about what I wrote, I only wanted to describe what I dreamed.

Laevi

Alright, so dealing with things one by one. Yes, I noticed in your stories that your characters are quite often well, let's call it freshly converted. It doesn't bother me in the least since they are stories. Yes, it doesn't work like that in RL, though.

The wording thing, sissy and so on, also quite understandable to me, and the funny thing, I also saw straight guys calling each other 'gay' and not really meaning it. It always cracks me up. And once again, yes, it was in Joel's previous life, but that's why I pointed out he might have been in denial

The money thing ... ah, here were tread two different grounds. Where I live, you'd have to have some kind of enormous insurance policy for it to work like that. So perhaps I just looked at Joel's situation from my own perspective *and quietly hoping you're doing fine now?*

And last but not least, that IS an interesting 'what-if' you suggested there. What if Joel met Perry before his accident? I mean, met and had the same kind of chemistry as they're having right now. Indeed, interesting to think about

Alright, I think I addressed everything Thanks for taking your time to reply to my comment and like I said, I'm looking forward to reading more

[Laevi]

I edited this because I upset someone who doesn't want to discuss, apparently, because they said goodbye in a review without leaving any means for contact.

My story suddenly died.

Martin Saint. I deleted it from AFF so I can work on it when I have more time, more peace, and less hectic at work.


People, please follow my Twitter or Facebook account to know more about me. It's in my profile, can't miss it.

And reviews: I LOVE THEM! I just hate it when they steer me in so many directions I can't follow it anymore and I get stuck. Okay?

And quarrels, I hate those more than anything. Also over a post of mine.

So please forgive me for being a drama-queen and keep giving me your reviews.

I'll try and make Martin Saint less fast-paced, less passionate so soon, and I will post it when I hear the pianos again.

If you want to discuss things with me, do it here. I'd like to reply but I can't, with reviews.

Edited by Laevi, 09 March 2012 - 05:13 AM.

[Laevi]

Thank you for your kind words. I'm happy you like my stories. I dreamed about what I feel when I write (playing the piano!) and I woke up, reading a long review (very kind, but also rather 'demanding' in my opinion although it probably was just criticism) I only heard a few notes... I couldn't enjoy it anymore and only thought about what other people would think...

I'll definitely keep the massage part. I loved that. But then I will no longer listen to critique because I have my own style I will be true to. I got steered in one direction and then the other way, and that doesn't work.

Oh, thank you for posting on this forum, I'm happy to respond and that isn't possible with reviews!

Edited by Laevi, 10 March 2012 - 09:27 PM.

[Laevi]

Yeah, sorry Kylee. Sometimes I'm a drama queen about my art and stories. The first few chapters will remain the same, it's the rest that I will change.

[Laevi]

I hear the pianos again...

Felix and the Saint came back to life. I only kept the first two chapters, and threw it all around after that.

I won't post any chapters until I'm completely satisfied, because it seems very fragile this time.

At least I'm enjoying myself again.

[Laevi]

Rushed

"It's a bit rushed".

Rushed, rushed... I'm writing an erotic story, not a bestselling novel, dammit... I want to get off not to fall asleep

Edited by Laevi, 01 April 2012 - 04:01 PM.

[Laevi]

Seems people are now too afraid to make comments

Anyway I'm happily daydreaming about... Chad

[Laevi]

I'm not getting tired of you at all! I have posted a story to help you understand my Wolves a bit better, as there are so many characters. This webpage will help you as well: http://theed.nl/wolves.html.

When you look at the ages on my webpage, you'll notice my men have aged through the years, just like me. By now I even introduced young Wolves, because they were getting so old! XD

I'll bring my stories in small doses so you won't get bored or over-flooded with them.

Enjoy and I'm very happy with your comments.

Edited by Laevi, 09 September 2012 - 03:40 PM.